Thursday, June 23, 2011

Rap I have been working on. What do you think?

The beat is right here:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=88dq7wYV2r4

Here are the lyrics:
Yeah, you hear that?
It's the intro.
This song goes out to
all those lovely people
who jus
Who Fu(ked wit me.

(verse 1)
I've been called many names since being a rapper
White spitter, white trash, whatevers a good joke
until I choke them with every line that's provoked
I'm dope, and everything I spit and flip is fu(kin ice cold,
I'm always told, I got competition to uphold
Fu(king f@gots flying around me like maggots
It's annoying and these habits, I got
One day will get me shot but until then
I'm the old chip off the block cuz I'm
a poisonous snake, injecting everything I rape
Fu(k illmatic, I'll be the next best classic since Rabbit
And I've just about had it with these punks and (unts
Pulling these fu(kin shitty stunts, to be haters to me
I'm the MVP, better than the bees knees,
As the MC, making history, geeze la-weez
I'm back and my rap still shines
hearing all my whicked rhymes in these messy times

What could I do to improve what I have so far? Thanks!

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